Grand Prize: a full manuscript request from agent Suzie Townsend!
Here's my pitch, in rough draft form:
Title: A BLIND EYE
Genre: YA Suspense/Romance.
Word Count: 54,000
The literary version:
Some are born blind. For others, tragedy leaves them blind. Then there are those who simply refuse to see. This is a story about all three.
The action version:
When Chris finds a blind girl hiding in his car, his attempt to runaway becomes a race to save her from death by scientific experimentation.
I like it! I am not introduced to a character or the plot but I still get a good sense of the story. That is great.ReplyDelete
top notch mrs. daines! the past 24 hours of reading pitches has been so inspirational, educational, and enjoyable. your pitch got my attention instantly and i want to read this book!ReplyDelete
Classy. I'd love to know more.ReplyDelete
This is really good, but kinda vague. I'd like to know more about the characters, conflict, and stakes.ReplyDelete
I agree with Elizabeth. It's vague, but intriguing. If you have any room, try and throw in a tidbit of the main conflict.ReplyDelete
my wife pointed out to me i made this comment right after i cleaned the bathroom...so indeed it was after the toilets! (not to mention as bad as my eye sight and attitude is i probably qualify for at least 2 of your categories)ReplyDelete
@dougfashiondisco: Unfortunately, we can never escape real life. And toilets are the epitome of real life. I guess that's why we write fiction... :)ReplyDelete
Alright. So I said I liked your first pitch but I LOVE your second pitch. I get a better idea of the story and I am hooked. Now I want to read your book!ReplyDelete
I feel you! I liked the first one too! But I understand why everyone wanted to see more from us. Peer pressure caused me to rewrite.ReplyDelete
The second one is still good and sounds very interesting. Thanks for sharing and best of luck.
And thank you for your comment about my Twitter pitch. Come see the new one if you want.
I LOVE the first one! The second one tells more about the story, but the first one grabs at my heart and my mind. Either way, this is a story I definitely want to read!ReplyDelete
Thanks for your comment on my pitch, and best of luck!
I really liked the first pitch. I agree that the second tells more about the story but I really love the way the first one is written. It's great.ReplyDelete
My Pet Blog
I would choose #1 over #2 - the wording is lovely. Too bad you can't somehow combine the two pitches. The first one is so great - but leaves me wondering what the book is about.ReplyDelete
My Wonderfully Dysfunctional Blog
So tough to choose just one! I think #1 is fantastic! Yes, we don't know who the MC is/are, but the themes of the book immediately hook me. I love it!ReplyDelete
@Yamile: I couldn't fit his whole name in the 140 characters! :)ReplyDelete